Peer Comment 2

Hello Mathew, I  enjoyed reading your post but for the first half I didn’t even feel like I was reading about a band with the way you were talking about them. Towards the end you begin to describe how you feel about the band but after reading I can’t tell if what you felt was good or bad from your perspective. When talking about the band you could have talked more about, I don’t know maybe their music. and when describing how you feel about them you could probably use analogies other people can easily grasp onto and not be more confused than before they read your thoughts.

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